Quibbons Quill

I suppose, looking back, Daniel Romis was never a bad man. He wrote me throughout his time in prison and though I never replied, I always read the letters. I ...

Hello Alpha, To answer the questions in order: Yes, it most certainly was OK, in fact better than OK it was good. Atmospheric and controlled. Familiar and yet not cliched ...

Hello, fading-dream (quite an appropriate name given the end of the story) Ok so I'm gonna be honest, not sure if I liked this or not. It was just really ...

Hey, just a quick review Firstly, it seems like I've said this a lot today, but the piece is just a little to short and also seems totally out of ...

Okey dokey, firsts things first welcome to YWS, I'm very happy to be your first reviewer. I should also say that I don't do grammar, can't review it and don't ...

Hello, Sorry to start on a bad note but I have two problems with pull the Trigger. No 1-The piece is quite short, obviously with it being a tense taster ...

Howsa, He'd tried telling them outright was behind the door. should be He'd tried telling them outright what was behind the door. Well I'm afraid that I haven't read the ...

Holla, looking broke down and pitiful . I think this would work better as "broken and pitiful". Just an idea. all that was left in the was salt Without "the" ...

Hello, Well the other reviews have pretty much said that the story needs more emotion. This is true, a story like this is all about emotion. Most stories are about ...

How do, My main point would be that there needs to be some more emotion put in to the piece. I got the impression that you had deliberately chosen to ...

I had always been afraid of death. The very thought of it terrified me. I once heard that evolution had caused us to develop the ability to forgot about death; ...

Hi, a quick review today firstly to be honest, i found the writing a bit stilted. the emotions were kinda told and not shown, which works in some styles but ...

Chapter One No-one had ever suggested to Peter Markel, that he might not be the cleverest person in the room. As he had had only lived in rooms and other ...

She looked beautiful even as she died. The wind rustled her hair; blowing up behind her it seemed almost like a halo. The blood dripped slowly from her eyes, down ...

Chapter Two Daniel and I were at the shopping centre. Yeah, all right I know, classic loser teenager place to be. Total cliché, but there’s a reason clichés are clichés. ...